I'm trying to work out how to write good haiku - according to a number of poets on the AP site, what passes for Haiku is garbage, concentrating just on a 5/7/5 syllable count. But then many of us agree that a lot of poetry is undisciplined garbage too, so we won't single out haiku. I don't think I am very good at haiku, but I am trying to learn the many subtleties. This one is based on another poem of mine, "Butterfly", from 1976. It tries to condense that poem into its essence, in 3 lines. I don't know how good or bad this one is - I'm waiting for a critique.